The night was crisp and clear, with a full moon hanging low over a calm sea and lighting the hills around me with a soft glow. The dew-laden grass looked to be sparkling with gems. There were a thousand stars hanging low on the horizon, the Milky Way spilling across the sky as if it were a trail of soft, glistening tears. I pushed Da’s bicycle up to the top of the hill, looking back briefly to make sure I hadn’t woken Mum, all the while thinking that she’d be laying in bed, listening for me. When I crested the hill I paused, looking out over the wide Celtic Sea and wondering at the silence and the serenity of it—the very stillness of everything about me—before making my way to Felicity’s house where I could see the soft blush of lights glowing in the distance.
I like the story especiallly the female characte who tricks the young dolt-in-love. The only part of the story I dont like is the beginning two or three sentences that are marred by descriptive clichess: "soft glow" "dew-laden" "trail of glistening tears" "soft blush". Theres way too much unecessay description or lets say beendoneamilliontimes befoe, and it impedes the story and makes a readerwant to say "Get on with it so you can get into the dam house already!"
Like this one...And, wish it was a book. A real, live book with crisp pages to turn quickly when involved in a plot and waiting for more to come. REALLY LOVE BOOKS MUCH BETTER THAN THIS ELECTRONIC B.S.
Can comprehend your desire to focus upon your craft. Feel as a fish on a line who went for the wormy bait...If only to finish this tale...Do you feel my floppin' on the line here?
Like this one...And, wish it was a book. A real, live book with crisp pages to turn quickly when involved in a plot and waiting for more to come. REALLY LOVE BOOKS MUCH BETTER THAN THIS ELECTRONIC B.S.
Can comprehend your desire to focus upon your craft. Feel as a fish on a line who went for the wormy bait...If only to finish this tale...Do you feel my floppin' on the line here?
I like the story especiallly the female characte who tricks the young dolt-in-love. The only part of the story I dont like is the beginning two or three sentences that are marred by descriptive clichess: "soft glow" "dew-laden" "trail of glistening tears" "soft blush". Theres way too much unecessay description or lets say beendoneamilliontimes befoe, and it impedes the story and makes a readerwant to say "Get on with it so you can get into the dam house already!"
I just found you through The Library. I loved this story! Beautiful setting & details! I'm going to subscribe and look forward to reading more.
Oh my. What a love story. A life story.
Like this one...And, wish it was a book. A real, live book with crisp pages to turn quickly when involved in a plot and waiting for more to come. REALLY LOVE BOOKS MUCH BETTER THAN THIS ELECTRONIC B.S.
Can comprehend your desire to focus upon your craft. Feel as a fish on a line who went for the wormy bait...If only to finish this tale...Do you feel my floppin' on the line here?
Like this one...And, wish it was a book. A real, live book with crisp pages to turn quickly when involved in a plot and waiting for more to come. REALLY LOVE BOOKS MUCH BETTER THAN THIS ELECTRONIC B.S.
Can comprehend your desire to focus upon your craft. Feel as a fish on a line who went for the wormy bait...If only to finish this tale...Do you feel my floppin' on the line here?