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Fantastic, Ben. The setting and the characters are authentic and real. The undercurrent of the brutal war unseen from this little island but weighing heavily on all. The last sentence comes as quite a shock. How can I not jump right to part 2? Masterful work Ben.

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Thank you Jim. I've always liked this one.

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Beautiful prose, Ben. You seem to write effortlessly from the POV of a 17- year-old boy. Thanks for bringing this back from the archive. I will check out part 2.

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Thank you Sharron. It's not hard thinking like a 17 year old, all they think about is sex -- oh wait, that ALL we think about, no matter what age we are!

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Um, yes. Women, too. Apparently.

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What a moving story you've written! Not only can I feel the setting, but your characters and plot really pull at the heart strings.

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Thank you so much, that means a lot to me.

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You set a wonderful scene with so much subtle drama interwoven with it. I'm hooked!

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I have just started this story now, Ben. It is a brilliant beginning -- it is so clear in its visuals, I am immersed in the "movie" of it already.

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Thank you so much Sharron. I know you will like this one. It's painful and heart wrenching.

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That makes me sound a little masochistic, Ben But, yes, you are right. ha ha ha

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