Read the FIRST ENTRY of a new story of mine--a love story--set during the turmoil of Independence in Congo, 1960. Vanessa and Richard Paton set off up the Congo, to Bulongo Station, where tragedy strikes and Vanessa has to rely on her own strengths and try not to fall in love.
I enjoyed this short story and took it to be complete. Am I right? If so, I agree, it seems very Hemingway-esque. I feel for the woman and fear for her marriage, if that's what it is, with Richard. But it captures the inner-life of women, especially in the 60s, reluctant to speak out, to defend oneself against the discourtesy or coldness or indifference found in the men around her. Well done.
Had a chance to read this one before heading off. Really love the layering of the setting with the roles of the characters. Could go in some interesting places. The end feels a little Hemingway-esque in the coldness of the narration.
Your characterization and dialog are excellent, Mr. Woestenburg. This piece reads like a contemporary stage play. Though I see no trace whatsoever of the "love story" you promised in your introduction, I am very interested in seeing the next installment. I have subscribed in order to not miss it. Sharron at 🍁Leaves
I enjoyed this short story and took it to be complete. Am I right? If so, I agree, it seems very Hemingway-esque. I feel for the woman and fear for her marriage, if that's what it is, with Richard. But it captures the inner-life of women, especially in the 60s, reluctant to speak out, to defend oneself against the discourtesy or coldness or indifference found in the men around her. Well done.
I'm intrigued. Good storyline. I see a one-sided love relationship but then perhaps Richard is very reserved.
Had a chance to read this one before heading off. Really love the layering of the setting with the roles of the characters. Could go in some interesting places. The end feels a little Hemingway-esque in the coldness of the narration.
You should keep going with this. I kept imagining Bogie and Bacall playing their parts here.
Your characterization and dialog are excellent, Mr. Woestenburg. This piece reads like a contemporary stage play. Though I see no trace whatsoever of the "love story" you promised in your introduction, I am very interested in seeing the next installment. I have subscribed in order to not miss it. Sharron at 🍁Leaves
There is mystery in this story-the couple are avoiding the problems in their relationship. Well written Ben. Cheers, Heather