Great job, Ben! I love this story. It reminds me of Somerset Maugham’s short stories set in exotic outposts of the British Empire, where a character stumbles on a mysterious remittance man who turns out to be a former lord with a life story packed with curious incidents.
One minor observation: The second part launches into the stranger’s narrative without mentioning his name again. I think it would help to have his name repeated near the beginning of this chapter, and maybe a couple sentences where the main narrator (the author who’s telling the man’s story) makes some asides where he assesses the guy or reflects on what he’s saying--something in the first para or two that re-immerses the reader into the frame story.
That's a rad pic, Ben.
Great job, Ben! I love this story. It reminds me of Somerset Maugham’s short stories set in exotic outposts of the British Empire, where a character stumbles on a mysterious remittance man who turns out to be a former lord with a life story packed with curious incidents.
One minor observation: The second part launches into the stranger’s narrative without mentioning his name again. I think it would help to have his name repeated near the beginning of this chapter, and maybe a couple sentences where the main narrator (the author who’s telling the man’s story) makes some asides where he assesses the guy or reflects on what he’s saying--something in the first para or two that re-immerses the reader into the frame story.