A lot of stuff happens off stage, so to speak. It just came out like that. You know, sometimes when you're writing something, you're just following the story as it comes out.
Oh, absolutely... it was my inner editor talking, lol! If you ever rework this, a little ping in Frank's head when he's arguing with Ray about him being killed... the realization that with the work he's doing, he might be a target...
Reading the comments, I want to say that I did think for a moment that I may have missed a
chapter (and I may have because of recent travel), but there was nothing in this chapter which wasn't adequately set up, and I believe some of the reaction is due to format. If this were in a paper or eBook format where there is a built in reassurance of authorial intent vs reader mistake, I doubt that would occur to me. At no point before do we see a glimpse of the pertinent dream so that like the characters we must take their content and truth on faith, and I, as a single sample reader, do not find the slight disorientation or off-balanced initial feeling as disruptive.
Thank you so much. I don't believe at any point during the story that one of Ray's dreams are witnessed by the reader. They're accepted by everyone without question because of the consequences that follow. The ship sinks, the planes get shot down, people die, it's just a matter of course--they all follow a path that only he can see. There's no need for the reader to see it as well. The fact the older brother Jack works for the OSS and goes out on missions is never discussed either. It's all very "hush-hush" because of the events surrounding them. Why wouldn't there be German spies? There were lots of English who believed in the Nazi way, just as there were Americans who did as well. The fact he's willing to beat the information out of the woman he says he loves doesn't say much for the man, but hey, she WAS planning his death, so he wasn't really wrong in what he did, was he? It's a moral question, and the reader sees the reaction of both Ray, and the Narrator--after learning (if they remember) that Ray has been known to hit his wife sometimes. Two different witnesses to the same event, with two different perspectives.
"If there really was a God like you think there is, He wouldn’t let this happen.”Hah! Now there's a thought. It never works like that, does it...
This chapter...hmmm. I don't immediately know how ( this flashback?) fits in. It was such a departure. But I am sure it will become clear with the final installments...
Tough one... this is such a great story, Ben.
Thank you. I thought people might not like the way the story went off like that.
I was just wondering how Frank reached the conclusion that she was a spy...
A lot of stuff happens off stage, so to speak. It just came out like that. You know, sometimes when you're writing something, you're just following the story as it comes out.
Oh, absolutely... it was my inner editor talking, lol! If you ever rework this, a little ping in Frank's head when he's arguing with Ray about him being killed... the realization that with the work he's doing, he might be a target...
Reading the comments, I want to say that I did think for a moment that I may have missed a
chapter (and I may have because of recent travel), but there was nothing in this chapter which wasn't adequately set up, and I believe some of the reaction is due to format. If this were in a paper or eBook format where there is a built in reassurance of authorial intent vs reader mistake, I doubt that would occur to me. At no point before do we see a glimpse of the pertinent dream so that like the characters we must take their content and truth on faith, and I, as a single sample reader, do not find the slight disorientation or off-balanced initial feeling as disruptive.
Thank you so much. I don't believe at any point during the story that one of Ray's dreams are witnessed by the reader. They're accepted by everyone without question because of the consequences that follow. The ship sinks, the planes get shot down, people die, it's just a matter of course--they all follow a path that only he can see. There's no need for the reader to see it as well. The fact the older brother Jack works for the OSS and goes out on missions is never discussed either. It's all very "hush-hush" because of the events surrounding them. Why wouldn't there be German spies? There were lots of English who believed in the Nazi way, just as there were Americans who did as well. The fact he's willing to beat the information out of the woman he says he loves doesn't say much for the man, but hey, she WAS planning his death, so he wasn't really wrong in what he did, was he? It's a moral question, and the reader sees the reaction of both Ray, and the Narrator--after learning (if they remember) that Ray has been known to hit his wife sometimes. Two different witnesses to the same event, with two different perspectives.
"If there really was a God like you think there is, He wouldn’t let this happen.”Hah! Now there's a thought. It never works like that, does it...
This chapter...hmmm. I don't immediately know how ( this flashback?) fits in. It was such a departure. But I am sure it will become clear with the final installments...