Brennis is still my favorite character. Strong, young, less jaded. That is a fine description of the stable and surrounding yard. Nicely detailed. I suggest a change in one piece of Scottish grammar here, though. You write, "You dinna can remember?" I am pretty sure it would be, "Ye cannae remember?" or even " Do ye no remember?" What do. you think?
Brennis is still my favorite character. Strong, young, less jaded. That is a fine description of the stable and surrounding yard. Nicely detailed. I suggest a change in one piece of Scottish grammar here, though. You write, "You dinna can remember?" I am pretty sure it would be, "Ye cannae remember?" or even " Do ye no remember?" What do. you think?
I like that. It’s perfect, actually.
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