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Ok, how did I miss the final instalment?! I’m so glad you posted the table of contents!

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Sep 29Liked by Ben Woestenburg

Ah! Superb ending, Ben. What a poignant, heart-breaking last line. So glad I followed this story.

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Thank you Sharron. I'm pleased you liked it. As usual, I keep thinking I could make it better, but hey, we all do that, don't we?

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Sep 30Liked by Ben Woestenburg

Yes, we do. I have made countless revisions after posting. When I was writing academic papers, I always knew when a piece was finished. With fiction, I never know and keep fiddling with it forever...

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Hi Ben, we're getting at the end... I loved this story. This segment, to me, feels a bit rushed, a bit hopping between Martin, Anneliese, the journalist, the kid, Dieter... I believe you should expand it somewhat, let the reader relax in the characters and this momentous event. There's also a bit of an inconsistency between the moment Martin sees the shadow, it feels like he already knows it's Dieter, and then the end where he appears to be "discovering" it's Dieter. Just my 2 cents...

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And I appreciate that...a lot. I was even as short as three weeks ago, still trying to nail the landing. I also felt that Martin knew it was Dieter -- I mean, that it came across like that. I'll definitely have to take another look at it, but for now, I have to lt it go.

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